A Peek Into the Novel’s Villains and Antagonists
Chapters Completed: 20
Chapters In Progress: 4
Chapters Not Started: 10
“Chronicling The Craft” is an article series where I share my experience with writing my current work-in-progress (WIP), which is a fantasy novel. Every 5,000 words, I let readers know what I’ve accomplished since the previous article and share advice, discoveries, techniques, etc. Besides the word count in each article title, a “chapter ticker” at the top also tracks my progress as I use the skip-around / “writercopter” method to write the novel. Today’s installment celebrates the book reaching 75,000 and 80,000 words in length.
Yup, it’s a double installment of Chronicling The Craft! Although it doesn’t exactly mean double the fun, topics, length, etc. I went on another planned writing vacation during the first week of September. Going into that vacation, I was closing in on 75,000 words, but I didn’t want to halt the novel’s progress partway through the week to squeeze in a blog article. So, I decided to barrel past the 75K mark and see how far I could take the novel from there. Today, it stands at a hair over 80,200 words. *does a happy dance*
Here’s what I’ve worked on since the previous Chronicle:
- Chapter 24 (a.k.a. the Sad Chapter) is done. Writing this section was a challenge, and for several reasons. I’ll share the two more important reasons: First, I needed to step into my protagonist Eva’s mindset and write from a dark place of grief and guilt. Things got pretty emotional at times, but that’s what I needed to do. Second, I’d always planned that Eva and her fellow Faerie Councilors would sing a song in their language for a specific occasion. What a neat idea (and totally inspired by Tolkein, I admit) – until the song was all that left to write for that chapter, and then it hit me: I had to write song lyrics in a language I had created. *gulp* Two hours later, it was done, and I swayed back and forth between “Yay! I did it!” and “You crazy writer, that was absurd!” for the rest of the day.
- Chapter 19 is also complete. This section shows Eva and Aurek’s friendship continuing to grow, and Aurek entrusting a specific task to Eva that he believes will help with their mission. It also sheds more light on the Bhadurak (more on them shortly) through a conversation Eva has with other characters – and ends with a frightening and unexpected encounter.
- Chapter 20 is now underway. When I last left Eva there, she was frustrated – as in, about-to-yank-out-her-hair frustrated. That exactly how I wanted to her feel at that moment. *muahaha*
- I also started working on the novel’s closing chapter (currently Chapter 34). I was hearing one of the WIP’s final conversations in my head, and I was afraid I’d lose it if I didn’t record the dialogue just then. Now I have to fight the urge to go back there until the end of this drafting stage. Even though I’m using the “skip-around” method with an outline and I know how the story’s going to end, I still want that final chapter to be the last chapter I finish for the book. We’ll see how long I can resist…
- And yes, those backstory and character development appendices are still works-in-progress, too.
Breaking another 25,000-word milestone means something special with these Chronicles: It’s reveal time! So, you get to learn something else new and exclusive about the WIP. Today, I’m thrilled to share with you some tidbits about the villains and antagonists. I won’t tell you everything, for length’s sake and in order to not give away too much of the story, but just enough to sate your appetite.
Also, the images shown below are in no way an accurate or complete representation of each character. They’re mainly to give you a rough idea of what I’m picturing when I write. This goes especially for the first photo – the Bhadurak should be more frightening and less Pac-Man-ish, but it’s close enough.
The Bhadurak: The best way to describe the Bhadurak is a race of parasitic demons, led by the calculating Nargorak. These creatures appear as faceless, wingless shadows with fire-red slits for eyes and a raspy, penetrating voice that (according to witnesses) “doesn’t come from a mouth, but from every part of the Bhadurak.” In their normal shadow forms, the Bhadurak travel by flight and are never alone. They do not eat, sleep, or require nourishment of any kind; and they can’t fall ill or be injured or killed by weapons, poison, or other “normal” means. Basically, the Bhadurak is the Great Isle’s “undead” species.
A Bhadurak’s parasitism is usually strategic. The demons choose hosts who are either physically weak or unwell (ill, mad, or depressed), or harbor a flaw that the Bhadurak can manipulate as a means to their end. The Bhadurak then physically forces itself into the host’s body (known as a “shadow strike”) and begins feeding off the host’s energy and soul. Eventually, the parasite overpowers the host’s free will with its own, leading to the person’s death. This process can take several days up to months, depending on the host’s mental and physical condition and the Bhadurak’s plans for that person. And while a host always exhibits symptoms of being possessed by a Bhadurak (known as the “shadow sickness”), the host can’t be saved once the parasite inhabits them.
Now, if you’ve been following these Chronicles, you already know that the novel’s protagonist Eva belongs to a race of Faeries. What if I told you the Bhadurak’s origins are tied to the improper burial of Faeries? In Eva’s world, a proper Faerie “burial” is a memorial service where Faeries must recite an irreversible spell that delivers the deceased Faerie’s magical remnants into the heavens. If a Faerie is denied that “deliverance,” their magic decays and becomes a literal – and resentful – shadow of their former self. The Faeries also hold the key to the Bhadurak’s destruction – but Eva and her people don’t know that at the start of the novel.
I’m sure you may have questions about the Bhadurak, but I have to stop here to share the story’s other antagonists with you. 😉
Prince Virikar of Fae: Prince Virikar (a.k.a. Virik) is the Commander of the Royal Guard of Fae and the older of the Faerie King’s two sons. However, he’s not next in line for the throne. That privilege was handed to Virik’s younger brother Milos after Virik’s selfish, violent behavior led to the death of the King’s top advisor. Since then, Virik has been desperate to regain his father’s favor. That’s all backstory, however; only hints of it will appear in the story.
When readers first meet Virik, they’ll see he’s charming, persistent, and loyal to the King. He’s also manipulative, condescending, and brazen enough to rob others of their due credit – and he’s not on good terms with Eva and the rest of the Council. Eva witnesses this first-hand when Virik confronts her early in the WIP, and then when he threatens (both at home and in letters to the Council) to take control of the Mountain Folk’s mission and send the Council home.
For me, the key with Virik is to make him a sympathetic antagonist, not a one-dimensional source of aggravation. Unfortunately, the latter was my original idea for him. *cringes* Once I read more blog articles about writing villains and antagonists, I realized I was taking Virik down the wrong path. So, when it’s time to revise the WIP, I’ll need to tweak Virik’s lines and actions to change him from an annoying bad-boy into a son who will boldly yet blindly do whatever it takes to reach his goals.
Lord Elkesoro: The Faerie King’s current top advisor, Lord Elkesoro is deeply prejudiced against the Mountain Folk. When the King chooses to help Aurek and his men instead of following Elkesoro’s urging to imprison them, Elkesoro takes matters into his own hands. His actions lead to his own exile from Fae, which further motivates Elkesoro to try to disrupt the Mountain Folk’s mission – and incites in him a bitter vengeance against his own kind.
Out of all the antagonists in the novel, however, this last one may the most important one to the story…
The Protagonist, Eva: If you’ve already read Eva’s character profile, you may have deduced that Eva can be her own worst enemy. She’s loathed the Mountain Folk since she was 5 years old, when Eva’s family was brutally attacked and her parents killed by three Mountain Men. So, when Aurek and his troupe of Mountain Men arrived in the Faerie’s forest home, Eva is forced to confront her long-held hatred and her desire for revenge – especially once her Council is tasked to help Aurek’s men on a mission that will take them perilously close to Bhadurak territory. Will Eva learn to let go of her past and do what she needs to do as a Councilor? Or, will she lose control of her anger and prejudice and jeopardize the mission, as well as her own life?
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These four groups of characters – the Bhadurak, Prince Virik, Lord Elkesoro, and Eva – make up the primary antagonists in the WIP. Other conflicts will arise from more minor “antagonists.” For example, the different personalities of Eva and her fellow Councilors will cause friction among them, and Eva and Aurek will butt heads at times. The Mountain Folk will also face discrimination from other non-Faerie characters during their journey. Thus, the novel will be fraught with all kinds of tension, as any story should.
Who are your favorite literary villains and antagonists? Why? In your opinion, what makes a good villain or antagonist? If you’re working on your own WIP, who are your villain(s) and/or antagonist(s)? Feel free to share your answers – and ask any questions about the above – by leaving your comments below.
Next Chronicle: When the WIP reaches 85,000 words
10 thoughts on “Chronicling The Craft: 75,000 & 80,000 Words”
Wait, so you constructed a language…and then wrote song lyrics…in that language…woah…
Quick question: when constructing this language, did you follow any particular strategy or method? There’s an alien language in my own work which I largely gloss over right now, and I’m thinking I should try to get a better “feel” for it at some point or other.
In any case…this really is quite collection of antagonists you have here. I get the impression that the Bhadurak will be the least pressing out of Eva’s opponents for much of her journey, for some reason; is that at all accurate (assuming you’re willing to divulge such things 😉 )?
Yeah. Exactly. It seemed like such a great idea when I thought of it months ago, and then I wanted to kick myself when I actually finished writing it!
To be perfectly honest, I don’t know any strategies for linguistics. Although with the Fairies language, I did come up with conjugations for past tense, future tense, and command form verbs. But basically I started by looking up words in a few select languages that had the “feel” I was looking for, then taking bits and pieces and making new words. The Faerie language, for example, is a mish-mash of Hebrew, Hindu, Greek, and Japanese. It might make more sense when those words actually appear in the text… *face turns strawberry red*
Oh, the Bhadurak will make appearances. 😉 There’s also discussion about the Bhadurak in strategic places, since it’s important the reader learn about this race but not be bombarded with backstory. But to answer your question, without giving much away: Yes, you’re right.
Thank you for continuing to comment here, by the way! I really appreciate it. 😀
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